The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart shows percentages of three different nutrients in typical meals. As the charts show sodium and saturated fat intake takes place during dinner, in
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highest proportion. Meanwhile, from sodium, people in the USA eat
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less via snacks, which is only 14%, and take in only 16%
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saturated fat during breakfast.
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, they consume almost the same amount of both at lunch, which proportion is between 26 to 29%. The society of the USA eats up the most from added sugar from snacks and the least from meals
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lunch.
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, from all the nutrients mentioned above,
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people eat the least amount from all at breakfast, which
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percentage is
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%.
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the comparison, in the USA, humans eat from sodium the maximum during breakfast and snacking, and the maximum at dinner. The same statement is true for saturated fat as well. Meanwhile, the
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community eats the most of added sugar through snacks.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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