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Nowadays, many people change jobs quite regularly, rather than working in the one company for their entire careers. Why do you think this is happening? How can companies keep their workers?

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The working
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 habits have changed quite a lot in the past years. Usually one worked at the same place all his life
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 in the new
generations
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 it is common to be more polyvalent. In the
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 essay, I will explain the main reasons why it happens and some solutions from companies to keep their workers.
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, education increased drastically in the
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 decades. Schools and Universities are no longer just for the wealthy.
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in my opinion, the majority of the population has more skills and
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higher professional positions. With
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 in mind, the new generations are in constant research for a better career and do not accept being paid under their value.
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, someone who has a master is expecting to evolve and gain more money over the years.
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, in case it is not happening, young people nowadays are not afraid of change.
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, companies can stimulate their workers in order to keep them. If they make them feel accomplished they will have no apparent reason to swish.
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 making them feel independent and in control of some projects.
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, creating a good relationship between the team will create a healthy work environment
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 of stimulating criticism or, toxic competition.
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, most people have an extensive range of knowledge in our times and no longer believe in only one job. It is predictable a career that varies from different activities like having multiple income sources. Briefly, enterprises must be prepared for rotativity.
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