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As most people spend a major part of their life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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Adults spend the majority of their lifetime at
work
,
therefore
 being satisfied with their
work
environment
 is extremely important. So much that it’s actually what drives people to look for another
job
 while at their current position. There are many
factors
 that can contribute to
a
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healthy and pleasant
work
 life. Let’s take a look at some of the main reasons why an employee can actually be able to enjoy their time at
work
. There are what we could consider “internal”
factors
 that shape the perfect
work
environment
.
Who
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 you spend time with during these 6 to 8 hours shifts clearly has a strong
impact
 on your wellbeing. Someone can have a big paycheck, live very close to
work
 and actually enjoy the tasks they perform
everyday
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 but if they have to deal with mean comments, glares and an extremely competitive
environment
, they could find themselves dreading to go to
work
each
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morning. So having nice and professional co-workers can definitely make a huge difference. A very well organised and clean office can
also
 have a positive
impact
 on the
work
environment
.
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, who wants to
work
 surrounded by rubbish and a mess of files and papers? The same goes for having a
job
 that you actually enjoy and for which you have studied
for
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. If we leave aside the actual physical
workplace
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 we can see there are other
factors
, external you could call them, that
also
 have a big
impact
 on a worker’s happiness. Say
for instance
 the duration of their daily commute. There is a big difference between travelling 20 minutes to 40 minutes every single day back and forth to and from
work
. Whether you travel by car or by public transportation, you will inevitably have less time for other important things before and after your
work
 hours. As mentioned previously, another key contributor to
job
 satisfaction can be the salary an employee receives in exchange for the tasks they perform. And it is probably the main one when considering a
job
 offer. These are not the only
factors
 that have an
impact
 on
job
 satisfaction but they can be considered a solid foundation and should be taken into consideration by both parties: the employers and the employees.
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