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In companies, promotions to high positions should be given to employees inside the company and not to somebody outside the company or new hiring. Agree or disagree?

Promotion to high positions should not be given to new hiring, rather to
employees
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 inside the company.
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, I do not agree with
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 statement wherein
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 material I will describe why outsiders may be the best solution for companies that need to fill their management post.
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 and foremost, companies when they need to hire workers for management positions look inside their
organization
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first
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.
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, in my point of view, when they do not find the desired worker that fits the firm needs it will force them to start looking outside the
business
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.
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, if a company is stuck at a certain level and need to hit a higher ground in their industry they will need to hire a professional who has the know-how to work at the position they have currently available. In which there are any
employees
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 inside the group who has
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 knowledge.
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, in my point of view, in many situations hiring outsiders
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 of
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 inside the company can
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 bring good knowledge for the
organization
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's workforce.
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, if the group give a promotion to a competitor's manager bringing him or her to their side, the
organization
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 will have the opportunity to understand some
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 processes in a certain way that could bring advantages to the firm.
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, hiring a professional not from the
business
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 can bring advantages to the team principally when the firm is fighting against competition and needs innovation. In conclusion, I disagree that companies promotions to high positions should be given to internal
employees
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. In my view, in many cases outsiders can bring more value to the
business
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 because they can bring a new perspective to the
organization
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, improving it
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