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Preservatives found in many foods mean they last longer and do not spoil, although there is concern that they can have adverse effects on our health. Do the dangers that arise from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages?

#preservatives #foods #concern #effects #health #dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
Eating healthy is essential in
order
 to gain the energy people need for their ambitions and goals. On many
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occasions
ocassions
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 industries prefer to make their
food
products
last
 longer with
preservatives
. Many
claim
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 that these strategies can have negative effects on peoples health. The question is if the negatives from the
chemicals
 are less
then
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than
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 the positives of using
preservatives
 in many foods. In my opinion, the drawbacks of long term
food
which
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that
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 contain
preservatives
 are much more
then
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than
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 the positives that people gain.
To begin
 with, by using
chemicals
 on
food
 the environment
suffer
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suffers
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 because it is forced to
last
 longer by cutting down their physical life cycle.
For example
, all
products
sucks
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 as vegetables have their own life cycle which must be followed in
order
 to have fresh
food
. If
chemicals
 are used on these
products
 in
order
 to
to
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last
 longer the product is spoiled and the plants can not reproduce the product.
As a result
, not only does the environment have bad effects but
also
 the people which eat unhealthy
food
. Meanwhile, many citizens suffer from dangerous
diseas
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disease
diseases
be
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by
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 eating
chemicals
 that are involved in the
products
such
 as diabetes or even cancer.
For instance
, many studies have shown that the
chemicals
 which are used increase
significally
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significantly
 the chance of diagnosing with cancer in the future.
As a result
, young adults should prefer to eat biological
products
 in
order
 to remain
healthu
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healthy
 and to get the vitamins a fresh product provides. In
conclucion
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conclusion
, eating healthy is
crusial
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crucial
 for every age group
dispite
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despite
 the cost.
Preservatives
 should be avoided to decrease the change of
deseases
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diseases
. In my
opinions
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opinion
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, it is vital that fresh
food
 without
preservatives
 be more
advertisised
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advertised
 in
order
 to raise awareness about the positive aspects which healthy
food
 provides.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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