Preservatives found in many foods mean they last longer and do not spoil, although there is concern that they can have adverse effects on our health. Do the dangers that arise from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages?

Eating healthy is essential in
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to gain the energy people need for their ambitions and goals. On many
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industries prefer to make their
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products
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longer with
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. Many
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that these strategies can have negative effects on peoples health. The question is if the negatives from the
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are less
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the positives of using
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in many foods. In my opinion, the drawbacks of long term
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contain
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are much more
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the positives that people gain.
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on
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the environment
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because it is forced to
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longer by cutting down their physical life cycle.
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, all
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as vegetables have their own life cycle which must be followed in
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to have fresh
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. If
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are used on these
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in
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longer the product is spoiled and the plants can not reproduce the product.
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, not only does the environment have bad effects but
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the people which eat unhealthy
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. Meanwhile, many citizens suffer from dangerous
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disease
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eating
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that are involved in the
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such
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as diabetes or even cancer.
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, many studies have shown that the
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which are used increase
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the chance of diagnosing with cancer in the future.
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, young adults should prefer to eat biological
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in
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to remain
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healthy
and to get the vitamins a fresh product provides. In
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, eating healthy is
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crucial
for every age group
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despite
the cost.
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should be avoided to decrease the change of
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diseases
. In my
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, it is vital that fresh
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without
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be more
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advertised
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to raise awareness about the positive aspects which healthy
food
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provides.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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