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You enjoyed a holiday organized by a tour company. Write a letter to the manager and praise the tour guide who accompanied you on the journey. In your letter – Give the details of your holiday – Explain what the tour guide did that was special and helpful – Suggest how the manager may reward the tour guide.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter in connection with my latest journey organized by your firm. I have travelled by your
tour
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 10 times more or less and the
last
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 time I enjoyed the most as a
tour
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guide
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 was very knowledgeable and knew everything from scratch. The trip itself was very pleasant. We have travelled to Istanbul and stayed there for almost 5 days. The
tour
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guide
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 showed us all the historical places and we had a stroll on the main square of the city, Taksim. The reason why I enjoyed
this
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 trip the most is that Josh, the
tour
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guide
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, had planned everything in advance and his timing was magnificent.
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, he tried his best that everyone involved in
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tour
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has
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 a whale of a time and
to go
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 back home with great memories. anyway, I would like to suggest a reward for your employee if it is in your interest. Honestly, there are not a lot of people who are fully committed and dedicated to their job. So if I were you, I would have considered a bonus for the
tour
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guide
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 which not only will make him proud but
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 will encourage other staff to work better.
This
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 is all I would like to share with you. Thank you for taking the time
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this
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 letter. Yours faithfully,

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Task Response
The letter does not fully address all the points mentioned in the prompt. Provide specific details of the holiday and elaborate on the qualities of the tour guide.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of the letter lacks coherence and cohesion. Use paragraphing to organize ideas and the logical structure of the letter needs improvement.
Lexical Resource
The lexical resource is adequate, but there are some errors in word choices and expressions. Use a wider range of vocabulary and idiomatic expressions to enhance the lexical resource.
Grammatical Range
Several grammatical errors such as subject-verb agreement, wrong verb tenses, and incorrect use of articles. Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to improve the overall quality of writing.
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