The given bar charts provide information about various options chosen by the UK students after finishing their graduation and post graduation studies except pursuing full-time employment in the year 2008. Some people think that the government should strictly control the supply of fresh water, as it is a limited resource, while others it should not be regulated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
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Some
people
think that the government
should strictly control the supply of fresh water
, as it is a limited resource, while
others it
should not be regulated.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
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people
argue that there should be strict regulation on the use of fresh
Correct your spelling
freshwater
water
by the government
; however
, others think that water
should be available freely to all the
individuals. I Correct article usage
apply
also
believe that the government
should impose some limitation imposed on the supply of the
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apply
fresh
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freshwater
water
. Both the
views will be discussed in detail with examples in upcoming paragraphs.
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Firstly
, water
is a basic physiological need of human beings without which life is impossible. Scientific studies have proven that water
is necessary to maintain equilibrium in human bodies. It helps in maintaining physical
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the physical
as well as
mental well being
of individuals. Add a hyphen
well-being
Therefore
, it is unfair for the government
to control this
basic amenity. Secondly
, if people
will have to pay for the consumption of water
, it will put financial
burden on Add an article
a financial
the financial
people
. The citizens of underdeveloped or developing countries, who are below the poverty line will be most influenced by this
regulation. For instance
, millions of poor people
who lives
in the form of extended families in India will be unable to afford the cost of the Correct subject-verb agreement
live
water
they need to fulfill
the needs of their large families. Change the spelling
fulfil
Consequently
, people
will decrease their water
usage which will compromise their health, hygiene, and sanitation.
On the other hand
, if no restrictions are imposed, earth
can eventually run out of Add an article
the earth
the
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fresh
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freshwater
water
due to
its overuse. A research study reveals that in the next
50 years, more than billion
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a billion
people
will live without safe drinking water
. Therefore
, regulation is advantageous to prevent the wastage of the
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apply
water
because people
will use it wisely if the limits will be imposed. Additionally
, the government
is spending funds to install and maintain the water
supply system. Therefore
, if the citizens will pay a certain amount in order to have the
access Correct article usage
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of
the Change preposition
to
water
supply, it will help the government
to use that money in providing, maintaining, and extending the facilities.
To conclude
, there should be certain charges imposed while
installing the water
supply system in people
’s home
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homes
however
, the water
supply should be free to all the
citizens so that everyone can enjoy Correct article usage
apply
this
resource irrespective of their family size and financial background.Submitted by johaljassi10 on
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