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2 year ago, Samsung declared that their repair service can be provided in the every corner of India. They choose to deliver this news by story telling on social media. Thus, they make the following video and posted it on YOUTUBE.

#year #samsung #repair #service #corner #india #news #story #media #video #youtube
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matter of fact with the advancement of Science human
being
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beings
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 seek greater comfort for themselves,
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,many ways have been invented to connect
people
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. like phone
cells
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calls
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, email, texting or
video
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 calling .
i
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 started covering
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 subject ,with the expansion of social networks
video
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 calling is commonplace in many
people
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.
video
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 calling making a visual call to one or more
people
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.today
video
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 calling ,
video
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 conferencing and
video
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 chat synonymously . it's clear that
video
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 calling in the modern world , more
people
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 can work from home .many companies hold their meeting with videoconferencing for the convenience and save both ,time and money .speeds up our communication and work because you can see and talk with staffs or friend right
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 and there or you can sharing
scenery
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the scenery
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 with your friends at the same time.it is good to know when you do
video
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 calling with friends or
colleague
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colleagues
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 you can see the face and understand the emotions. on the other ,hand
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 has disadvantages if we don't consider the economic and time saving it has low efficiency the Direct presence of individuals.
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 in communication
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 we see each other , it
sort
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is sort
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 of artificial and it is
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 more discreet because shows your image .there are
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 more problems or more advantages.in my opinion
video
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 calling is better than phone calls,
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however
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 all of these depends on how you use it
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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