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You have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: Give details of your stay What were the high & low points of the hotel What are your suggestions; recommendations and / or complaints about the hotel Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....................,

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I believe that other recreational
activities
 in schools or colleges have given preferences and it is very imperative in academic life. In the forthcoming, I shall explain the cause with some sample cases.
To begin
 with, students have been through
studies
 and exams throughout the year. To increase their strength other than
studies
, many colleges arrange sports competition which includes football, volleyball and other well-known sports to test their skills.
As a result
, many pupils come out with great results. In the future, one of the games chooses to enhance their ability and make the career path.
For example
, an average student good in
studies
 but in other
activities
 performed extremely well.
Moreover
, many companies conduct quiz competitions to improve general knowledge.
Secondly
,
this
 type of learning enhance their skills and one can get motivated. Extra circular
activities
 increase efficiency at the workplace as well as in the school. At Schools, students get bored of doing daily routine
studies
. Sometimes they feel the change by participating in the
activities
.
For example
, many schools planned a picnic every year, to explore new places and take experience.
Furthermore
, teenagers
also
 come out to see the outside world. To nurture the talent and promote youngsters, these
activities
 gives immense opportunity at a young age. To conclude, to become mentally and physically strong, these
activities
 play a significant role in their life. Often students get bored and dull, the whole year involved in
studies
 and work does not provide proper productivity in their work and
studies
.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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