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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
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people
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working
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 considering only
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 they can choose an occupation that they do not enjoy to earn more. I do admit
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 case is pretty often,
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however
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 there are
also
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 workers that like doing it.
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,
money
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 is a key
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 a good living, for
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 plenty of
people
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 choose their occupation depending on salary, even if they do not like a job. Here in Kazakhstan, by choosing a humanitarian
specialty
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, student risks
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not
find
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 a good place
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 work in future,
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 they select tech professions despite how hard is that.
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,
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 will live from salary to salary and start
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.
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, some individuals start their job from their hobby. For
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 kind of
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, the means do not matter, they work only because they do like it.
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, some artists paint starting from childhood, painting is a part of their life,
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 it is
way
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 to be paid. And even celebrities,
they
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earn
money
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 only by showing their lives. In conclusion, for some individuals,
money
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it
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is an important state, whereas for other ones it is not.
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, anyone can find a path to make
money
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, it depends on
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the person
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, on what they decide to do.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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