Traffic and accommodation problems are increasing and government should encourage businesses to move from cities to rural areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is a common belief that government should encourage business move from urban area to
countryside
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due to
traffic
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and
accomondation
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accommodation
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, there is a more persuasive argument that these changes have an overall negative effect because the rural area does not have enough facilities that a company needs, these disadvantages
are far outweigh
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the benefits. On the one hand, businesses moving from
cities
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to
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countryside
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the countryside
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can reduce
traffic
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congestion in the urban area because workers will move to the
countryside
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because their work is in the
countryside
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. The population of
cities
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will decline, the
traffic
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its
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more clear.
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, during covid-19, most
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the firms in Hanoi, Vietnam imposes a policy that employees are working at home to avoid the disease and as
result
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the
traffic
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jams in the city decreased. The city
are
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clear and the pollution is gone. It is similar to the wave that
business
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businesses
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move to rural
areas
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, the metropolis
traffic
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congestions will decline and accommodation problems are solved.
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, in
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the countryside
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countryside
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there are not enough facilities for companies. Rural
areas
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have a poor
traffic
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system without subways or freeways which makes employees harder to reach their workplaces. The countrysides have very
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infrastructures and public buildings, which
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makes workers'
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standards lower than in
cities
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. According to a
reccent
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recent
survey, rural
areas
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in Vietnam does not have enough infrastructure for workers to live and make their living.
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makes companies' financial results
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decline and lower-income for employees To sum up, while
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there are some advantages
in
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moving companies from
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to rural
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, it is evident that the disadvantages of the moving wave are harmful, far outweigh the benefits.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic development
  • Capital infusion
  • Job opportunities
  • Standard of living
  • Urban overcrowding
  • Quality of life
  • Housing pressure
  • Healthcare pressure
  • Disruption
  • Deforestation
  • Pollution
  • Financial burden
  • Smaller companies
  • Infrastructure deficiencies
  • Sophisticated infrastructure
  • High-speed internet
  • Robust transportation networks
  • Modern amenities
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