People today don't make good use of their time and spend too much time watching TV and playing video games instead of participating in more productive activities. Do you agree or disagree?

People
nowadays spend too much
time
watching
television
and playing
video
games
, rather than participating in more productive
activities
. Personally, I totally agree with
this
for two reasons.
First
of all, I do believe that
people
nowadays, especially youngsters are mostly addicted to watching
television
and playing
video
games
in their
leisure
time
.
Although
there is not a definite way
of
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how to spend
the
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leisure
time
, I believe that there is an acceptable level of spending
time
on
leisure
time
. If the
leisure
time
is within
few
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a few
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hours but
not
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affect the normal working hours, it is considered
as
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acceptable.
However
, youngsters are usually spending too much
time
on
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chilling out and
the
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study or work
is interfered
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.
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In addition
,
people
prefer to spend
time
on
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watching
television
and
video
games
, rather than participating in more productive
activities
. Productive
activities
can be defined as
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some things
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somethings
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something
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which can help to acquire more
knowledges
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knowledge
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such
as reading books or newspapers or improve
the
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well-being
such
as doing sports or taking part in outdoor
activities
.
People
tend to spend
time
sedentarily which is perceived to be unproductive while doing
outdoors
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sports
is
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perceived to be productive since well-being is being improved. In conclusion, it is strongly believed that
people
today, particularly youngsters spend too much
time
watching
television
and playing
video
games
, rather than taking part in more productive
activities
such
as reading books or doing sports in their
leisure
time
. It is suggested that parents should set a maximum amount of
leisure
time
for their children and recommend outdoor family
activities
such
as cycling or jogging as a way of relaxing.
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