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The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
the
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gender bias is a well-discussed subject.
In addition
, the
females
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female's
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 situation has adjusted a fair amount in many countries over the past 50 years.
However
, it seems societies cannot accept these equal opportunities yet. In my view,
although
 women's role has converted in Compare with the past
but
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, still there are many disadvantages and
also
, societies cannot coop with these equal conditions
such
 as my country Iran, the most members of citizens have illogical prejudice so, in these ,society types have limited choices for entertainments and activities.
Also
, they cannot go to the stadium for watching football matches and it is forbidden if they have gone there, they would have imprisonment as a punishment.
consequently
, women should wear limited clothes and have
hijab
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.
Moreover
, it is impossible for females to choose their wearing and
that is
 an unfair law. So, in many areas still, gender equality has no means.
However
, it is advisable to pay attention
some
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 superb females condition which has switched. In the previous women's life, they could not have social activities or a career. They used to take care
children
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 or cooking. But, these days they have equal job opportunities. Great jobs
ranges
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 from driving trucks to managing big companies. All in
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 countries are really far from
to
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complete gender biases. In conclusion, it cannot be ignored the improvement of equal opportunities but there is a long way to achieve
this
 goal completely.
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