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Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

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The pie charts illustrate the ratio of
sodium
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, saturated
fats
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 and added
sugar
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 in four average daily meals consumed by Americans. The percentages of these three nutrients in breakfast,
lunch
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,
dinner
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 and
snacks
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 that American citizens generally consume are given and they are detrimental
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 health if consumed plenty in quantity. Overall, dinners and lunches that the USA residents consume are
sodium
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 and saturated
fats
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 rich while their
snacks
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 have a high portion of added
sugar
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. In
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, USA citizens'
sodium
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,
sugar
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 and saturated
fats
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intake
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 during the breakfast is comparatively lower, around 14-16% each time.
Intake
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 of these nutrients is considerably higher in food items they eat during
lunch
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 and
dinner
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. The
lunch
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 they eat comprises
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29%
sodium
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, 26% saturated
fats
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 and nearly 20%
sugar
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. They consume much higher percentages of these nutrients, which are harmful to health when eaten too much, while they heave their
dinner
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. Their
intake
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 of
sodium
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, saturated
fats
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 and
sugar
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 during
dinner
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 are 43%, 37% and 23% respectively.
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, the
snacks
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 they enjoy contain high
sugar
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 and
fats
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, 42% and 21%, respectively, and the
sugar
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intake
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 in
snacks
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 is higher than that of
dinner
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 and
lunch
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.

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