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Scientists have been warning for many years that in order to protect the environment people should use less energy. However, most people do not change their ways of living. What is causing this behaviour? How can people be encouraged to change?

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Experts have been giving advice on how individuals can contribute to saving the
environment
,
however
people
 tend to ignore
this
,
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 and just continue their habits.
This
 essay will discuss the possible reasons behind the
people
's ignorance in protecting the
environment
 and how to convince them to change their lifestyles. Lack of education might be one of the reasons why
people
 are not fully knowledgeable about the negative effects of using unnecessary energy. Not everyone has the chance to go to school. Nowadays, science classes are already taking up topics about global warming and the factors related to it. Even at
this
 early stage, students will have the idea of what a community can contribute to saving the
environment
.
For example
,
people
 who leave in far-flung areas mostly are underprivileged when it comes to education.
As a result
, they continue doing some contributing threats to global
warming
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,
such
 as burning garbage including dried leaves and plastics. There are schools that create groups of students/youth that are conducting campaigns on how to save mother earth. By doing
this
, students will be able to share their knowledge may it be in school or in the community. In conclusion,
people
 in the community, educated or not will be equipped with the knowledge on how to protect and save the
environment
.
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