Climate change is a phenomenon that affects countries all over the world. Many people strongly believe that it is the responsibility of individuals, rather than corporations and governments, to deal with this problem. To what extent do you agree?

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In recent years,
the
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global warming
is become
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worse and
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impacts
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wide
of
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the
nations
, and plenty of
people
say that
this
problem is a public duty
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the local
authorities
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duty. In my opinion, I firmly believe that
nations
have some duty for the weather tempercher’s change, but the countries and the
authorities
are playing
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important role in
this
problem
,
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because they can establish some
rules
or educate companies and
nations
to protect the
environment
.
First
of all, the local
authorities
establish
rules
to help protect the
environment
. As there are many pollutions are created by companies and
nations
, which are a large number of
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made by the
people
or plastic
container
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for food used by the restaurants;
therefore
, the
authorities
can create
rules
which is separating recycle and
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rubish
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rubbish
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or
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company
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companies
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let out harmful air to the
environment
. In doing so, it can help reduce
the
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pollutions
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.
Secondly
, the government can create
coure
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course
courses
for
people
to let
they
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realize
importance
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of
environment
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. There are many
people
do
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not realize human activities bring critical
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to the
environment
, which is over log
forstes
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forests
.
For instance
, in my country, our school educate us
what
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impact
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weather’s
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weather
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chang
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and how to
potect
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protect
environment
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the environment
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.
Hence
, creating some courses
educate
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people
by the government,
it
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helps individuals know how to protect our planet. To sum up, unnormal weather
change
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and global warming are
a
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important things for everyone, but some do not know what
making
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this
happen, so the
authorities
should establish courses to educate
people
and
making
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rules
to require them.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • responsibility
  • address
  • crucial role
  • impact
  • collaboration
  • carbon footprint
  • regulations
  • policies
  • incentivize
  • act responsibly
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