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Climate change is a phenomenon that affects countries all over the world. Many people strongly believe that it is the responsibility of individuals, rather than corporations and governments, to deal with this problem. To what extent do you agree?

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In recent years,
the
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global warming
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 worse and
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impacts
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 wide
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the
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, and plenty of
people
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 say that
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 problem is a public duty
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 the local
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authorities
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 duty. In my opinion, I firmly believe that
nations
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 have some duty for the weather tempercher’s change, but the countries and the
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 are playing
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 important role in
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 problem
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 because they can establish some
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 or educate companies and
nations
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 to protect the
environment
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.
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 of all, the local
authorities
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 establish
rules
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 to help protect the
environment
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. As there are many pollutions are created by companies and
nations
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, which are a large number of
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 made by the
people
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 or plastic
container
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 for food used by the restaurants;
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, the
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 can create
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 which is separating recycle and
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rubish
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 or
limiting
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company
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companies
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 let out harmful air to the
environment
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. In doing so, it can help reduce
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pollutions
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pollution
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.
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, the government can create
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course
courses
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 to let
they
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 realize
importance
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 of
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environment
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. There are many
people
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do
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 not realize human activities bring critical
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 to the
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, which is over log
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forests
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, in my country, our school educate us
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impact
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weather’s
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chang
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 and how to
potect
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protect
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environment
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.
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, creating some courses
educate
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people
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 by the government,
it
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helps individuals know how to protect our planet. To sum up, unnormal weather
change
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 and global warming are
a
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important things for everyone, but some do not know what
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this
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 happen, so the
authorities
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 should establish courses to educate
people
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 and
making
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rules
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 to require them.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • responsibility
  • address
  • crucial role
  • impact
  • collaboration
  • carbon footprint
  • regulations
  • policies
  • incentivize
  • act responsibly
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