You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You and some friends want to start a weekly dance club and you have found a hall that would be suitable to hold your meetings. Write a letter to the owner of the hall. In you letter, 1. explain your and your friends project 2. ask if it possible to rent the hall and under the what terms 3. state what day and what timings you would like to use the hall You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

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letter to raise our interest regarding one of your halls that I found

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a newspaper.

First

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of all, let me introduce

about

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apply

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our project and notion. As we are big fans of dance and music, we would like to work

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in a

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business that

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is related

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to our hobby.

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one of the reasons why we would like to get your hall to open a dance club.

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we have been looking

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for a

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suitable room with some specifications for months, we could not find anything else.

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, we were luckily found that your room met all of our required facts. I was wondering if you could rent your hall with a year lease.

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, do not worry about the terms, we are pleased to offer the same as your requested amount. If you do not mind, we want to look and check around the actual condition of the room

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before signing. If it is in

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perfect condition, we would

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tolike

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use your hall

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from the

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day of April. Yours faithfully, Tun Naung Win

tunnaungwin11Thu May 05 2022

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

183 words

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The Greeting

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children at home instead of sending their children to school. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development.

Some people say that schools should concentrate on teaching students academic subjects that will be useful for their future careers. Other people, say that subjects such as music and sports are also necessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

You currently live in a rental apartment, and the noise from your neighbours disturbs you. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter describe how this situation affects you; explain what steps you have taken to address the problem; ask the landlord to take action to resolve the issue.

Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. What are the causes of this problem, and what measures can be taken to solve it?