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The comparison of different kinds of energy consumption of the UK in two years.

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The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of
energy
consumption
 in five categories in the UK in the
year
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 2000 and 2010. Overall, it is noticeable that in both
years
 the most significant
sources
 of
energy
 were coal and gas,which combined are over half of the
energy
 consumed.While solar and other
sources
 of
energy
 generated the least percentage in both
years
. Apparently,
energy
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 produced by coal comprised
of
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30% in the
first
 year and remained the appropriate percentage in 2010.
Likewise
,in 2000,gas
consumption
 was at 29.5% which rose marginally to 30% by the end of 10
years
 period. Regarding the ramming methods of
energy
consumption
,the data showed that in the UK,the usage of petrol
decresed
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decreased
 by 9% which is the largest percentage compared to the other.
In addition
,solar
energy
 showed a minimal change over 10
years
 from 6.5% to 10%.A very small fraction is other
sources
 of
energy
.
This
energy
 made up 5% of the total in 2000.
On the contrary
, in 2010 other
sources
 of
energy
 increased by 4% compared to 9% of
energy
consumption
by
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2010.
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