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A big salary is much important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
It has been widely argued that a big salary
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more important than
job
 satisfaction. As far as I am concerned,
job
 satisfaction plays a significant role in order to be successful in the carrier-life.
First
, in my opinion, if someone does not satisfy with his
job
, he can not do the
job
 in the best way he could. Enjoying the
job
 someone has, is the main factor that he could give his utmost attention to it as he is more enthusiastic
toward
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 the daily
works
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 they do. It is more prominent in jobs that
needs
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 excellent attention,
such
 as medical professions as they always need endless focus.
Furthermore
, I think if employees are not satisfied with their working conditions, they will not be able to stay doing the same
job
 for a long period of time.
For example
, jobs that need
long distance
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 commuting always cause employees to feel exhausted and they are more likely to have work-familie balance issues. BesidesEmployers that do not offer
a
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good working circumstances,
they
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will not able to retain their workers for a long time.
Finally
, In my point of view, people who decide to do the
job
 that they like
it
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and more convenient
to
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 them,
they
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may have
better
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 income in long-term meaning. Passionate workmen always try to improve their skills
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as a result
 they will have a better salary later in their carrier-life. To conclude,
job
 satisfaction plays an important role in the succession of workers. They would have
a
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great attention to
details
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, they will stay longer on the same
job
 and they are more likely to have a better salary in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
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  • stress levels
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  • job security
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