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4. Is it good for families if parents need to travel a lot in their job or if they need to move to other cities? Is moving to a new location positive for children?

#families #parents #travel #job #move #cities #location #children
Nowadays, there are a couple of families tending to move a lot in their work or even if they must migrate to other countries. I assume that it has both sides
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good and bad for their kids. The primary reason, their children should learn to get used to knowing
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environment
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. They have to start to make
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 again. to extrovert kids, it is
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, but to introvert others, it seems hard to communicate in
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 environment.
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 accustomed to another curriculum in
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 school. To sum up, parents should try to give their children having
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 life.
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