Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. Do you agree?
Although
more than fifty percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
companies
employees are female in several advanced countries, the high majority of Change noun form
companies'
company's
executive level
roles in businesses Add a hyphen
executive-level
occupied
by men. Add a missing verb
are occupied
This
essay totally agree
that a particular proposition of these positions should be allocated to Change the verb form
agrees
females
because women usually outperform men in university courses and equality is a basic right to
them.
The main reason why Change preposition
for
companies
ought to assign a specific percentage of these positions to females
is to achieve equality. It is unfair to fill these high-level Correct your spelling
roles
rolls
with more men when women are the majority of the employees. Since both Correct your spelling
roles
gender
Change to a plural noun
genders
are
mainly have the same work competence when it comes to job productivity. In Saudi Arabia, Unnecessary verb
apply
for example
, the 2030 vision is looking forward to reach
an opportunity equivalence Change the verb form
reaching
this
is by forcing employers to maintain an equal percentages
of both girls and boys.
Another reason Correct the article-noun agreement
percentage
Fix the infinitive
to support
support
Correct subject-verb agreement
supports
this
argument is that females
mostly do better academically than males. Human resources in many companies
usually higher
new workforce regarding their high grades and experience so Correct your spelling
hire
that
it is unreasonable to fill these executive-level positions with Correct word choice
apply
gender
base rather than expertise as Correct article usage
a gender
females
commonly have better academic performance. For instance
, girls students in Saudi Arabia pharmacy Correct your spelling
college
collage
have Correct your spelling
college
showed
Wrong verb form
shown
a significant high grades
in most subjects Correct the article-noun agreement
a significant high grade
significant high grades
last
five years.
In conclusion, top companies
vacancy should be filled with a specified percentage of both gender in order to obtain the women
right by equityChange noun form
women's
,
and to acknowledge their academic performance as girls have higher gradesRemove the comma
apply
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