IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

More and more people are working from home rather than at the workplaces. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others think it will bring stress to the home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #home #workplaces #workers #families #stress
The chart exhibits the amount of
money
 spent on 5 consumer goods (cars, computers, clothing, food, and fuel) in
Zambia
 and
Zimbabwe
 in 2020. Units are measured in United States dollars (USD). Overall, the
expenditure
 of the Republic of
Zambia
 is higher than that of
Zimbabwe
. Both Zambians and Zimbabweans spent the most
money
 on cars while in
Zambia
 the least amount of
money
 was spent on clothing compared to computers in
Zimbabwe
. In terms of cars, the people in
Zambia
 spent approximately $450,000 on
this
 as opposed to exactly £400,000 in
Zimbabwe
. The
expenditure
 on computers was higher in
Zambia
 than in
Zimbabwe
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
 is $250,000 and $50,000 respectively. The Zambians’
expenditure
 on fuel was slightly above $250,000 compared to $200,000k in
Zimbabwe
.
On the other hand
, the amount of
money
 paid out on the remaining goods was higher in
Zimbabwe
. About $180,000 was spent by the Zimbabweans on food which is slightly more than the Zambians who spent exactly $150,00k. Neither of the countries spent much on clothing which accounted for about $200,000 of
expenditure
 in
Zimbabwe
 and $100,00k in
Zambia
.
Submitted by marthandlovu on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: