Woman and men are commonly seen as having different strength and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Stereotypically different strengths and weaknesses are attributed to males and
femals
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females
based on their genders.
However
, I categorically disagree with
exclusion
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of either sex from any profession.I believe that throughout the history of humankind numerous
invdividuals
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individuals
have broken the
gender based
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archetypes .
Firstly
,
women
have proven that they are equally competent in several
male dominated
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professions.For
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instance
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the world has witnessed numerous
women
who took part in politics and
lead
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countries through
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the crisis
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crisis
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.
Further
,
military
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, which is considered to be a conventionally
masucline
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masculine
profession has numerous
women
on
frontlines
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.
Thus
, it is clearly evident that excluding
women
from these roles would be a potential disaster.
Secondly
,men have
also
proven their abilities in traditionally feminine professions.To
examplify
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exemplify
,a staggering number of men have become top chefs.
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nursing, which is
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female-dominated
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female
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a female
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dominated
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profession has seen a large growth in the number of men in the
last
decade.
As a result
, their contribution
through
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the pandemic was significant. In a
nutshell
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to recapitulate the aforementioned arguments, I would like to
reintsate
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reinstate
reiterate
my position that gender equality is a fundamental factor for the progression of
the
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society.
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a
prejudice free
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work
enviroment
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environment
is key for holistic development.
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