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As most people spend a major part of their life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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Job
satisfaction
 is
integral
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 part of
person
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 freedom since several individuals spend their particular time of whole life at
work
.
Hence
, almost All employers expect to satisfy
for
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with
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 their
job
 in my opinion good communication with colleagues and
salary
growing
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 lead to
job
satisfaction
. According to a man who is
owner
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the owner
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 of best selling many features contribute to
job
satisfaction
 two of them are most necessary factors which to make
good
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the good
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 relationship among colleagues are much
salary
. Clearly many bosses always help their staff not saying what to do but rather doing
work
 with workers
this
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 efforts contribute
for
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job
 satisfying what's more good
salary
 is
also
 makes interest to
work
in other words
 no one can stand for only
little
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 money to much
work
 As
i
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 mentioned before all workers look forward to
job
satisfaction
 as long as anyone wants to improve to high stages in
personal
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a personal
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 and professional
job
 and
also
good
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a good
the good
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 condition for working. So
expection
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expectation
 of
job
 satisfying is
usual
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the usual
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 situation in these days. In conclusion due to essential part of
job
satisfaction
 in our life. Many people may be at
work
during
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apply
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the
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every day.
Therefore
 they need
much
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a lot of
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salary
 and
good
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a good
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 relationship with
people
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the people
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 who
work
 with them.
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