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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages
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The pie chart provides information about the percentage of
an
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university students in England, who usually talk various languages rather than English, in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, we can see that
spanish
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Spanish
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 has the
higest
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highest
 portion in 2000 and 2010. Another
language
 was high in 2010. No other
language
 was
bigher
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higher
bigger
 in 2000. French and two other
language
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languages
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 were similar in 2000 and 2010. In terms of 2000, no other
language
 was equally 20%. French below 20%. German and two other
language
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languages
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, both were the lowest percentage, which
equally
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 10%. Spanish had the
bigest
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 amount among
other
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the other
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 several
lahguage
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language
languages
, which was above 25%. With
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regards
of
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 2010, there
also
 the
lagest
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lowest
 amount was
spanish
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Spanish
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, which
around
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was around
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 30 to 30
percentage
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. No other
language
, French, Germany
were
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 equal, which was
exacly
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exactly
 10%.
Anither
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Another
language
 was nearly 19%, which
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is alsp
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alsp
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also
bigher
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bigger
higher
 in
this
 year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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