In modern times young adults spending more time with their friends and less time with family. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

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people are aware of the

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of

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equality in school. Some people suggest that the ratio of female and male students should be 1:1 in schools.

However

, I disagree with it. Universities shouldn’t recruit the same number of boys and

girls

because it is not practical.

This

is because teenagers have different talents and preferences. It is impossible to reach the excepted

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plan.

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, more

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like to register

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, linguistics and mathematics. If schools hope to attract more boys to attend the courses, they might lower these subjects’ minimum passing scores. It still cannot make sure

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equality in education.

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, I think there

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better suggestions aimed

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equal treatment

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gender

.

Firstly

, schools should treat the source, and they should avoid

gender

stereotypes.

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, most teachers and parents think males show better performance in STEM. It

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girls

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confidence to choose STEM subjects.

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, education departments should introduce training for school staff. It allows teachers to understand that females and males can have

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talents in various regions. Whatever

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, students will be encouraged to learn about areas they like.

Moreover

, governments should make policies for improving females’ welfare in the workplace.

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, many women don’t study some majors because they

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about their jobs in the

further

. In conclusion, it is not realistic to recruit the same number of

girls

and boys in one subject.

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, Colleges should emphasize

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patterns.

Therefore

, I believe that universities should not introduce the statement that half of

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course are male and female.