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The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is no denying
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 that nowadays exports and imports of things across
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borders have become debatable. Some
people
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 believe that it is a good thing whilst others consider that it damages local residents. I am in the favour of former
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instead
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 of the latter and will clarify my viewpoint in the forthcoming paragraphs. Nowadays, the vast majority of
people
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 consider that
free
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 movement of
goods
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 is becoming popular and giving a number of benefits to the nations one of the main advantages of
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 trend is economic
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.
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, nowadays, most firms prefer to publish their
goods
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 in foreign countries and their citizens prefer to buy their
products
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 by placing orders and companies export their
goods
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 from one country to another on the demand of their customers.
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, many businesses earn their profits just because the exporting business fulfils the needs of their consumers.
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this
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, all the steps help to raise the economic
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 of a country. Apart from that others believe that it is just a waste of time and can harm the
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 of the local industries
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 the completion of demands of their own nationalities. To explain, nowadays most of the citizens prefer to fulfil their demands without thinking about their local business and own countries
products
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. To exemplify, apple is a big firm and they export and import their
goods
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 all over the globe
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people
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 love to buy their
products
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 from other nations by getting the facilities of couriers.
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,
this
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 is not mandatory to buy from them so dwellers consider if they buy items from other nations
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it can halt their own countries' business and can cause many corporations' incomes.
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, local industries think that
people
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 should buy their
products
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 and not buy from foreign markets.
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, it can be rightly said that there are two arguments in which some
people
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 and I support the export and import facility to raise the economic
growth
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 of the nation but others claim that it is unethical and harm the local businesses.

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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear purpose and relates to the overall topic. Use topic sentences to introduce each paragraph's main idea.
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Provide a clearer opinion in the introduction and conclusion. Make sure to address all parts of the essay question clearly and comprehensively.
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