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You work in a busy but poorly organised office and you are keen to be promoted. Your employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department. Write a letter to your employer. In the letter ask to be considered for this job explain why you would be a suitable candidate outline the current problems and the changes you would like to make

#work #office #employer #supervisor #department #job #candidate #outline #changes
Dear
Mr.
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 Sam I am writing
this
 letter to express my interest
about
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 a new job vacancy
at
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 our department. I would like to describe myself and tell you about my experience.
First
 of all, I am a person who
like
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 to take a risk;
however
, I am a wise person.
Secondly
, I like to help, and willing people and I think all the employees at our company they like me, and I have a good experience in your company and out it
in addition
 to that, I can solve any problems
such
 as
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 employees issues, financial issues and legal compactions
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, as you know I have a lot of qualifications in my major so I can manage our department.
Although
 we have some
problem
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 in our company
specially
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 after COVID -19 pandemic and a promise
to
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you I will solve
it
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 after when I hold my new position
however
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, I can solve any problem in the feature whether side
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 of
pandemic
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 or any issues. Best Regards
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • keen to be promoted
  • suitable candidate
  • supervisor role
  • relevant experience
  • organizational abilities
  • problem-solving skills
  • familiarity with current problems
  • impact on productivity
  • streamlining processes
  • improving communication channels
  • introducing new tools and technologies
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