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Charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts compare the percentage of
water
 utilized for industrial, agricultural, and domestic use in six countries of the world. Overall, the most significant amount of
water
 is spent
for
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 farming even though there
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also
 manufactory contributed to the highest purposes in two other places.
Water
 employed for agriculture is the most dominant need in some areas including Central
Asia
, Africa, Southeast
Asia
, and South America. Among other countries, Central
Asia
 leads
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the highest percentage, at 89%.
Next
, even though domestic use is the least popular
of
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water
 usage in Central
Asia
 and Southeast
Asia
, its trend is reversed
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 Africa and South America. With regards to the remaining
of
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water
 purposes, industrial use comprises of significant rate in two other regions (North America and Europe) which
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stood at 53% and 49% respectively. The same trend is accounted for
agricultural
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 sector, while domestic purpose is the fewest proportion of
water
 utility.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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