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More and more people are working from home rather than at the workplaces. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others think it will bring stress to the home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #home #workplaces #workers #families #stress
The chart displays the
amount
 of
money
 used between
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 and
zimbabwe
 on goods that directly satisfy human wants in 2020.The unit of measurement used is $. Taking everything into account
zambia
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 spent a lot of
money
 on cars,computers and fuel than
zimbabwe
.Both
zambia
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 and
zimbabwe
 spent
money
 on cars whilst in
zambia
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 the least
amount
 of
money
 was spent on clothing compared to computers in
zimbabwe
.
Nevertheless
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zambian
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 citizens spent approximately $450,000 on cars while
zimbabweans
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Zimbabweans
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 spent almost $ 400,000.The
amount
 of
money
incured
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incurred
insured
 on computers was higher in
zambia
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 than in
zimbabwe
that
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which
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 is $250,000 and $50,000 respectively.The
zambian
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 expenditure on fuel was slightly above $250,000 compared to $200,000 in
zimbabwe
.
Moreover
,the
amount
 of
money
 paid out
the
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 remaining goods
was
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 higher on food which is slightly more than
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zambians
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the zambians
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 who used $150,000.Neither of the countries spent much on clothing which accounted for about $200,000 expenses in
zimbabwe
 and $100,000 in
zambia
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.
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