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More and more people are working from home rather than at the workplaces. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others think it will bring stress to the home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #home #workplaces #workers #families #stress
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To be honest I do not believe that
bicycles
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 are the best mode of transport in the cities.
to begin
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lack
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 of bicycle lanes and trails in most towns.
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 lack of storage as result many will
loose
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 them to thieves.
Generally
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 some people are disabled they are not able to use them .They can not be used in case of emergency because they're slow , imagine carrying a pregnant woman on
bike
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the bike
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 to the hospital.Another
drow
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draw
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 back is travel will be limited for one can not travel long distances using a bicycle .The final limitation is that they have poor lighting which can cause a lot of accidents during the night and rain season.Some
bicycles
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 do not have view mirrors which is a recipe for disaster .
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at
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 another angle
bicycles
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 can be the best mode of transport in the cities.Due to the fact that a lot of people do not like exercising , riding a bicycle to work will be the easiest exercise whilst you're going to your destination .
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this
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 leads to a healthier life . Reducing the risk of diabetes , cardiovascular diseases as well as depression .
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 it helps
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 calories
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 those who suffer
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obese
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 and builds strength
increases
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and increases
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 balance. Another important merit is it safe money because they are cheaper to purchase .The use of
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also
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 saves on
fuel
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 for some of them they don't need
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 and for those that need it the consumption is low ,
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 other projects that
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fuel
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 will have adequate
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Furthermore
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 it's smooth to manufacture the parts as an
out come
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outcome
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 the service will be
affordab
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affordable
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