The charts below show comparisons of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.

The charts below show comparisons of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.
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The provided pie charts demonstrate the
percentage
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of various
nutritions
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, namely carbohydrates, protein and fat in three distinct
diets
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the proportion of fat in
three
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the three
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diets
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accounted for the lowest. Another striking feature is that the
percentage
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of protein
nutritions
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nutrition
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in the average
diet
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and healthy
diet
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was similar.
To begin
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with, the proportion of carbohydrates in
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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and
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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for sports was
ranked-first
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ranked first
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at 50% and 60% respectively, compared to 40% in the average
diet
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. The
percentage
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of protein in the average
diet
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was similar to the
percentage
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of carbohydrates at 40%. The figure for
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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and
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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for sports stood at 30% and 25% respectively. It can be seen that the proportion of fat was the
ranked-
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ranked last
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last
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in three distinct
diets
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. The
percentage
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of fat in a healthy
diet
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for sports just accounted for 15%,
while
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the figure for
two
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the two
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remaining
diets
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had a similar
percent
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of 20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, diets, diet with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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