The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The two charts illustrate the number of British admissions who can speak many different languages
besides
English at a university located in England over two different years, 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, undergraduates in this
university who can not communicate in any accent except for
the native one accounted for the highest percentage while
people who speak German always occupied the lowest and stayed static at that time.
In 2000, the percentage of students who were capable of speaking English only applied 30%, which was the highest score, followed by 20% who were able to speak Spanish. The third
target proportion was 15%, which was represented by participants speaking French only and another speaker, besides
10% of people could communicate in French or two other languages.
In 2010, the amount of multilingual, their native language and another voice slightly increased by 5% which apply about 15%,35% and 20% respectively. Nevertheless
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the proportion of French-speaking, nearly 10%. Change preposition
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Finally
, the students who speak German only constituted the smallest percentage and stability unchanged at the same number by one-tenth in this
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