The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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pie charts
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about the sectors where
water
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used in six different areas throughout the world.
Overall
, it is clear in the charts that most
water
used
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in the field of agriculture among the three sectors
while
the percentages of industrial
use
and domestic
use
are average. To start with, in North America, half of the total
water
used in
industries
, two
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fifth and
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a
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ten
water
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in
field
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fields
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and
home
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respectively
while
in South America, Most of the
water
used for harvest consisted 71% and others consisted 10% (
industries
) and 19% (in
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).
Then
in Europe, again
industries
use
most of the
water
around 53%
while
Agricultural
use
(32%)
water
double time
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domestic
use
(15%). Next in Africa, 84%
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used
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in
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fields
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9% and 7%
water
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are
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used in houses and
industries
respectively.
Finally
,
Asia
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separated
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two sections named
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Asia
and South East
Asia
. Interestingly, both
Asia
used most
water
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agricultural purposes
while
in
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two sectors a little
water
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only.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, industries, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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