Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

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more expensive than it used to be.
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, no one will dispute the importance of
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, in my opinion, it is not the main factor to keep employees engaged. In
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I will discuss why I think job satisfaction is far better than a big
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and foremost, almost everything can be purchased but happiness. We can observe that wealthy people who show off their
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most time feel alone. Whereas, individuals from deprived
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savour the moment by doing what they love.
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my former employer raised my
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a few times, I was laid off because I feel like job satisfaction is superior big
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. Another overlooked reason is that companies will suffer from disinterested employees if they only use
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promotion as the only tool for workers to engage. It is not unreasonable to assume that the best work is that grew up from the hobby. Corporations will acquire a higher income and closer relationship between employees if they spend their budget on team building rather than on
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increases. Indeed, huge IT giants
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as Google, Meta and Apple allocate a big portion of their yearly expenses
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events that brings different departments together. In conclusion, most of the candidates ask about
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during interviews.
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, they are interested not only in the net value but
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in social activities which can make their work process less stressful and as a consequence it will boost job satisfaction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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