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Write a letter to the manager of your local bus service. They have recently made some changes to the bus services which created inconveniences for you. In your letter, explain: Q) What are the changes? Q) What are the problems you are facing? Q) What part of the service would you like to change?

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Dear sir. My name is Ahmad, I am an old passenger and I have been dealing with your company for a long time.
That is
 mean I used to using your buses and I appreciate your services. But recently, particularly after the bus timings changed, it has become more complicated. I am writing
this
 letter regarding the new times and reasons for
this
 change.
Firstly
, many employees and workers have to come early from far away, especially after reducing the number of your corporation's vehicles.
Therefore
, excess of time and lack of services, except that the distance is longer than before.
Furthermore
, arriving late like what happened to us
last
 week, as we got to work five minutes late. Wherefore, I would like to ask you to review your
last
 decision concerning changing transportation schedules, and I suggest you either use the old systems or increase the number of mobiles. Your faithfully.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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