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big salary is more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagre?

High
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 paying salary is more important than
job
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 fulfilment.
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desagress
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disagrees
disagree
 with
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 statement because
employees
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 will spend eight hours the
next
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 twenty-five
years
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 of their life, so it is vital to have some gratification in people's
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job
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jobs
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, and the quality of our performance is impacted when we are
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doing
doig
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doing
 what we really like.
Sense
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A sense
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 of well-being is vital to
perfom
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perform
 a
job
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 because
employees
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 will spend the
next
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 twenty-five
years
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 of their lives doing over and over the same
job
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, so it will be crucial to feel fulfilment by doing it.
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, it is essential to find gratification in our
job
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 because these activities will be
perfome
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performed
perform
 for so many
years
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 that not doing what we like, would be a
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nightmare
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night mare
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nightmare
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 for anyone.
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, some of the
employees
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 are requested to
work
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 overtime by the company, so
this
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imply
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implies
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 to continue doing what we love to do for a living.
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, at Fullerton College in
California
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,California
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 a group of scientists started an investigation which states that workers who
work
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 in the
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field
fiel
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field
 they love are more prompted to get a promotion because they perform a
high quality
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high-quality
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job
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 for pleasure and not with an intention to look for a high salary. The quality of a
job
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 is strongly impacted when people
work
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 in the area they like, so the outcomes most of the time are
oustanding
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outstanding
 performance.
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This
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 citizens tend to be
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responsible
responsabiles
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responsible
 and empathetic with issues presented in their jobs because they feel
concern
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concerned
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 about their
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workplace
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work place
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workplace
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.
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,
for
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apply
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those who
work
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 in a field where they are disliked, they tend to ignore the issues presented at
work
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 because they see
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this
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these
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 hurdles as an opportunity to change a
job
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. They feel no compromise or attachment with their
job
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. To explain
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, in The United States studies
states
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 that
employees
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 who feel some pleasure
with
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in
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 their jobs tend to be flexible with
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their work's
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work's
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work
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 schedule and accept more
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responsibilities
responsabilities
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responsibilities
 at
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job
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a job
the job
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 because they feel comfortable doing that particular
job
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. To conclude,
job
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 satisfaction is more important than having a
high paying
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high-paying
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 salary because
employees
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 will expend many
years
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 performing the same
job
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 that would be no sense working in a place where a person does not feel
sense
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a sense
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 of well-being for having that
job
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. After all, money is important but not crucial
like
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as
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job
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 satisfaction.

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