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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Job
satisfaction
 is one of the most
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preliminary
priliminary
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preliminary
factor
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 for a happy professional carrier for adults. Many factors are considered to have a
satisfied
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job
. In most
of
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the
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cases
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people
work
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working
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 in
a
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an
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irrelevent
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irrelevant
job
 may be due to
the
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family pressure or compulsive requirement they may not have
job
satisfaction
 in reality. In
this
 essay, I will explain the reasons for doing
such
 compulsive jobs
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with
wih
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with
out
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our
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interest
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interests
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.
Job
satisfaction
 is
guaged
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gauged
 by
basic
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a basic
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 factor
is
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enjoying what we do. There is a saying if we love what we do,
then
 no day we will work. If a surgeon likes
do
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 surgery.
Then
 doing operations will bring happiness. If someone loves art,
then
 he will enjoy working in an art gallery.
However
, if you
also
 get the proper motivation and
on
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job
trainings
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training
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 to excel
your
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in your
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 skills in the same field which you love doing
then
 you will be motivated and the outcome of work will always be positive . For
me
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,me
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 financial reward is not
measure
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a measure
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for
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of
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job
satisfaction
. If you love what you do, and you get paid for what you enjoy
then
 it's a bonus.
However
, it is not the same scenario with many
people
, due to
the
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family pressures or financial requirements
people
 do works which
is
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are
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 not
of
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their wish. A person after their
sudies
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studies
 or after
ataining
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attaining
 18
year's
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years
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 he is forced to do
job
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the job
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 in
many
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much
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 middle class or lower
middle class
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middle-class
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 families in India. For an instance, in
Mumbai
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,Mumbai
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 a survey found
60
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that 60
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% of marketing jobs are actually done by
people
 who are not from
marketing
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the marketing
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 field.
Then
 we
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interviewed
interviwed
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interviewed
 an employee who was an
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engineering
engeneering
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engineering
 student
works
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who works
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 as a sales representative for a pharmacy company. when asked why he was doing the
job
 he said he has
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to do
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do
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done
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 that
job
 so as to support his parents and family financially. He is not interested
to
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in
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 the
job
 but he does for feeding his family.
Therefore
 burdens of family
pushes
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 them to do the
job
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without
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with out
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without
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 their
likes
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like
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.
Job
 availability
also
 cannot be skipped .
People
 passing out from their schools only 40% get jobs rest do works as they get mostly not in their field of choice. In my opinion,
job
satisfaction
 is a gift of
life
 in adulthood. We may earn lots of money,
have
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and have
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 a dream house until we are satisfied with
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our job
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job
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jobs
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 we cannot have a
stress free
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stress-free
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life
. When we look back at our
life
 we should never regret back that we earned lots of money but did not enjoy our
life
.
Therefore
Job
satisfaction
 is very
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crucial
crusial
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crucial
 many don't get
due
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it due
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 to
the
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apply
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family pressures or financial burdens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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