You are planning a trip for you and a group of friends to a resort in a foreinn country. Write a letter to the manager of the resort requesting more information. Your letter should include When you hope to be staying at the resort Ask for suggestions on activities to do Ask for advice on places to eat for both vegetarian and family friendly places

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Dear sir or madam, I am writing

this

letter to require some

suggestion

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suggestions

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from you about our trip to your village. I am making a plan to travel

gold

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to gold

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mountain

month from 2th to

15th

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the 15th

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. There are 10

person

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people

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including 8adluts and

2children

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2 children

in our group.

However

, we have never been to your country before,

therefore

, could you please tell me how about the weather during that time

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normal and please give me some information what we should take. I researched online that

month some new activities will be opened in gold mountain park. We are very interested in and want to attend it, but we don’t know which one we need to book online before, so could you give me more details.

In addition

, we are all vegetarians and I reserved one villa with 5rooms for our group. We want to cook by ourselves since we are working in a restaurant. The booking detail did not show whether we can

cooking

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cook

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house

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the house

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, so could you confirm that we can

cooking

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cook

be cooking

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in the house

instead

of eating outside and show me

some place

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someplace

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that

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where

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we can

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buy

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some food materials near the house. I am hoping to receive your reply with your suggestion about

this

trip. If you have any

question

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please let me know, thank you so much. Yours faithfully,

Submitted by kevin. B on Mon Oct 10 2022

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

225 words

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