the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the different energy sources used in the production of electricity in Australia and France during the years 1980 and 2000. As illustrated by the chart in 1980 coal accounted for the generation of half of the amount of electrical
power
in Australia
while
hydropower, natural gas and
oil
were used in the production of the other half with 20%, 20% and 10% respectively. During the same period in France coal,
oil
and natural generated approximately the same percentage of electricity units around 20% each
whereas
nuclear and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
was utilized only
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20% cumulatively. After a 20-year period in Australia coal was the most popular fuel source increasing significantly from, 50% to 75%.
On the other hand
, we can see from the chart that
hydro
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hydropower
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power
rose slightly to 36% and natural gas and
oil
experienced a considerable decline. In 2000 in
France
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nuclear
power
became the most important source of electricity as it was responsible for the production of 75% of the entire amount of
elecricity
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electricity
units. The percentage of electrical
power
generated from coal and
oil
remained constant
while
natural gas and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
were used in a very small amount.
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