the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts compare the different energy sources used in the production of electricity in Australia and France during the years 1980 and 2000. As illustrated by the chart in 1980 coal accounted for the generation of half of the amount of electrical

power

in Australia

while

hydropower, natural gas and

oil

were used in the production of the other half with 20%, 20% and 10% respectively. During the same period in France coal,

oil

and natural generated approximately the same percentage of electricity units around 20% each

whereas

nuclear and

hydro

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hydropower

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power

was utilized only

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20% cumulatively. After a 20-year period in Australia coal was the most popular fuel source increasing significantly from, 50% to 75%.

On the other hand

, we can see from the chart that

hydro

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hydropower

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power

rose slightly to 36% and natural gas and

oil

experienced a considerable decline. In 2000 in

France

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,France

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nuclear

power

became the most important source of electricity as it was responsible for the production of 75% of the entire amount of

elecricity

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electricity

units. The percentage of electrical

power

generated from coal and

oil

remained constant

while

natural gas and

hydro

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hydropower

show examples

power

were used in a very small amount.

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