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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
It is said that jobs with high
salary
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 are
more
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preferable
than
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 jobs with pleasure. I disagree with
this
 statement. I will explain it in
this
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question
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why
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of why
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 workers are staying at work for a long time shows that most
of
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the
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people do not prioritize money. Employees have
choice
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the choice
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 to work with
a
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pleasure. On the one
hand
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 people want to have good conditions
at
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in
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working
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 area, while they spend more day time there.
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,
main
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 facilities
which
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required
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 for office workers,
such
as
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:
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 bright light,
new
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a new
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 laptop or personal computer, furniture,
coffee
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a coffee
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 room with coffee and tea and plenty
vacation
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of vacation
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 days.
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, people prefer fine
manager
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 and colleagues, which share
with
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experience and knowledge with them.
High-minded
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The high-minded
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 supervisor can give tasks with appropriate deadlines,
also
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and also
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 can give
right
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the right
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 feedback to
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the executed
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executed
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job
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the job
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. With
this
 type of
manager
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,manager
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 employees can be part of
structured
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the structured
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 group. Parallel with
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the supervisor
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supervisor
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supervisors
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 other colleagues can impact
to
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your working effectiveness with their understanding
each
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of each
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 other without any
efforts
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. When and manager and colleagues are working as one team without any arguments, there will be
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satisfied
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 job ever.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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