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Climate change is a big environmental problem that has become critical in last couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil fuels and use only alternative energy resources, such as wind and solar power. Others say that oil, gas and coal are essential for many industries, and not using them will lead to economic collapse.

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Climate change is the most urgent issue facing us today and it will lead to an environmental catastrophe on a global scale
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 if decisive actions are not taken. Many believe that using fossil fuels should be abandoned while
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others consider it impossible. I agree with the
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 group and think that
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 should find clean
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 to avoid
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 consequences of global warming.
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 hand, researchers proved a strong connection between burning fuels and the climate crisis.Burning
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fossil
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 to generate power releases carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases into the atmosphere. Which in turn traps heat and increases the temperature on our planet .
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 parts of Europe which used to be cooler now experience intense ,searing heat and the temperature soars above average in
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, extreme weather has become more frequent than before and parts of the world suffer widespread flooding regularly.
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 India experienced a destructive flood recently that by its end 200 people were dead.
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, applying renewable
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 not only does not harm the economy
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 will create
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industry
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 and job opportunities
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 if the changes are applied gradually . Moving to clean and renewable
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 will create new plants and offshore wind farms . There are many successful examples of using clean
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 around the world.
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 Germany supplies 60
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 of its electricity from solar power. To conclude,
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 many industries depend on oil and gas nowadays, it is absolutely vital that we change our ways to reduce our carbon footprint.Developing alternative
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 should be governments’
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 the world will suffer
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 environmental issues.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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