Climate change is a big environmental problem that has become critical in last couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil fuels and use only alternative energy resources, such as wind and solar power. Others say that oil, gas and coal are essential for many industries and not using them will lead to economic collapse. What is your opinion

There are so many causes
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global warming and
climate
change
such
as deforestation,
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of fertilization. As a
consequences
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,
sea
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the sea
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level is getting higher,
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and ice-mountains
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ice-mountains
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ice mountains
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are melting. I don’t think burning
fuels
are the main source of problem for
climate
change
.The world population is significantly growing and need to make
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amount of products for them. To run
industries
smoothly,
fuels
need to be accessed easily, alternative
energy
like solar power takes lots of space and there is
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not
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guarantee that we will get sufficient
energy
in time.
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rainy
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, it’s obviously clear that we won’t get enough
energy
for solar power.
Industries
in every sector need to run smoothly and regularly.
Industries
are very important not only for
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trade economy they are
also
giving
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jobs
for
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tons of people. Industrial growth is directly proportional to
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a country’s
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GDP and GNP.
Fuels
like oil,
gas
and coal are essentials for households, schools and some places as well. We can access those
fuels
very simply and don’t need to give much space for them to store because
government
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is sinking huge
gas
pipeline
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underground in most
of
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the
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countries.
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, we can get those
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affordable prices. On the one hand, burning those
fuels
are making
climate
change
,
however
, using alternative
energy
resources is not the best solution to tackle
the
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climate
change
. What we could do is ,
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more trees as trees will reduce air pollution, have to reduce the usage of plastic, recycle
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things and have to rely on ourselves rather than
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a machine
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machine
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machines
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. Government should lead
this
as a national campaign and
citizen
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citizens
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need to
collaboarate
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collaborate
enthusiastically to protect
climate
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change
. If governments in every country will protect
climate
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change
in
this
way, world temperature will
change
obviously and we can feel so many benefits
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it. Indeed, it is very important to protect our environment meanwhile it’s important to emphasize on
economy
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the economy
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. Usage of oil,
gas
,
coal
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and coal
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fuels
is fine; what we need to do is to
change
our habits to protect our
surrounding
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surroundings
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. In
this
way, we can build peaceful, green and prosperous nations.
Climate
change
is a big environmental problem that has become critical in
last
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the last
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couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil
fuels
and use only alternative
energy
resources,
such
as wind and solar power. Others say that oil,
gas
and coal are essential for many
industries
and
not
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that not
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using them will lead to economic collapse. What is your opinion
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