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Climate change is a big environmental problem that has become critical in last couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil fuels and use only alternative energy resources, such as wind and solar power. Others say that oil, gas and coal are essential for many industries and not using them will lead to economic collapse. What is your opinion

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There are so many causes
for
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of
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 global warming and
climate
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change
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such
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 as deforestation,
lack
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and lack
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 of fertilization. As a
consequences
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consequence
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,
sea
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the sea
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 level is getting higher,
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and ice-mountains
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ice-mountains
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ice mountains
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 are melting. I don’t think burning
fuels
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 are the main source of problem for
climate
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change
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.The world population is significantly growing and need to make
proper
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a proper
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 amount of products for them. To run
industries
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 smoothly,
fuels
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 need to be accessed easily, alternative
energy
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 like solar power takes lots of space and there is
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no
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not
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no
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 guarantee that we will get sufficient
energy
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 in time.
In
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On
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 rainy
reason
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reasons
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, it’s obviously clear that we won’t get enough
energy
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 for solar power.
Industries
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 in every sector need to run smoothly and regularly.
Industries
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 are very important not only for
world
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the world
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 trade economy they are
also
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giving
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for giving
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 jobs
for
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to
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 tons of people. Industrial growth is directly proportional to
country’s
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a country’s
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 GDP and GNP.
Fuels
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 like oil,
gas
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 and coal are essentials for households, schools and some places as well. We can access those
fuels
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 very simply and don’t need to give much space for them to store because
government
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the government
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 is sinking huge
gas
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pipeline
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pipelines
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 underground in most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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countries.
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, we can get those
with
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at
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 affordable prices. On the one hand, burning those
fuels
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 are making
climate
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change
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,
however
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, using alternative
energy
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 resources is not the best solution to tackle
the
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apply
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climate
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change
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. What we could do is ,
planting
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plant
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 more trees as trees will reduce air pollution, have to reduce the usage of plastic, recycle
the
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things and have to rely on ourselves rather than
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a machine
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machine
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machines
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. Government should lead
this
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 as a national campaign and
citizen
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citizens
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 need to
collaboarate
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collaborate
 enthusiastically to protect
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climate
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against climate
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change
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. If governments in every country will protect
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climate
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against climate
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change
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 in
this
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 way, world temperature will
change
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 obviously and we can feel so many benefits
on
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from
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 it. Indeed, it is very important to protect our environment meanwhile it’s important to emphasize on
economy
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the economy
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. Usage of oil,
gas
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,
coal
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and coal
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fuels
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 is fine; what we need to do is to
change
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 our habits to protect our
surrounding
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surroundings
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. In
this
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 way, we can build peaceful, green and prosperous nations.
Climate
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change
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 is a big environmental problem that has become critical in
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last
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the last
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 couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil
fuels
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 and use only alternative
energy
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 resources,
such
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 as wind and solar power. Others say that oil,
gas
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 and coal are essential for many
industries
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 and
not
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that not
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 using them will lead to economic collapse. What is your opinion
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