Climate change is one of the biggest environmental problems of the 21st century. Some people think that humans should stop using oil, gas and coal and switch to alternative energy resources, such as wind and solar power. Others claim that fossil fuels are essential for many industries, and not using them will result in economic recession. What is your opinion? Support your point of view with relevant examples.

Climate
change is one of the greatest challenges of our time. Equally important,
however
, is the need to ensure access to
energy
for quality of life and for economic
development
. It is
therefore
critically important to address
climate
change as
part
of the sustainable
development
agenda. Ongoing progress in the
development
of new
technologies
has brought confidence and hope that these objectives will be met in the
energy
system
. Dramatic price reductions and technological advancement of wind generators and solar photovoltaics have shown that these renewable
energy
resources can be important players in global electricity systems
,
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and that the long-anticipated breakthrough in cost-effective storage technology would shift primary
energy
mixes substantially. These developments have led invariably to an assumption that we are “done” with fossil
fuels
across the
energy
system
, that there is no need for
further
development
of new resources, and that we have to stop using them as soon as possible.
This
assumption has
also
led to a perception of “good” renewables-based
technologies
in global
energy
systems today, on the one hand, and “bad” fossil
fuels
-based
technologies
, on the other. The reality is that
this
debate is much more nuanced and requires
more
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thorough investigation. Carbon capture and storage (CCS) technology and managing methane
emissions
throughout the fossil
energy
value chain can help meet ambitious CO2 emission reduction targets, while fossil
fuels
remain
part
of the
energy
system
.
This
will thereby allow fossil
fuels
to become "
part
of the solution", rather than remain "
part
of the problem". All
technologies
have a role to play in an
energy
system
guided by rational economics. Fossil
fuels
comprise 80 per cent of
current
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global primary
energy
demand, and the
energy
system
is the source of approximately
two thirds
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of global CO2
emissions
. Inasmuch as methane and
other short-lived
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climate
pollutant (SLCP)
emissions
are believed to be severely underestimated, it is likely that
energy
production and use are the
source
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of an even greater share of
emissions
.
Further
, much of
the
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biomass
fuels
are currently used around the world in
small scale
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heating and cooking. These are highly inefficient and polluting, especially for indoor air quality in many less-developed countries. Renewable biomass used in
this
way is a problem for sustainable
development
. If current trends continue,
in other words
, if the current share of fossil
fuels
is maintained and
energy
demand nearly doubles by 2050,
emissions
will greatly surpass the amount of carbon that can be emitted if the global average temperature rise is to be limited to 2oC. That level of
emissions
would have disastrous
climate
consequences for the planet. There are a number of emission reduction opportunities for the
energy
sector, notably reducing the amount of
energy
consumed and reducing the net carbon intensity of the
energy
sector by fuel switching and by controlling CO2
emissions
.
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