many high level of positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than fifty percent female. compnies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
essay, I will be cogitating
how
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some
teachers
reward students who achieve outstanding academic
results
in comparison to
teachers
that reward those that display the most improvement. While I will consider both views, it is my opinion that most
teachers
focus on academic
results
rather than personal improvement within subject areas.
To begin
, I would like to draw attention to the importance of academic
results
: students attend schools and universities in order to achieve outstanding outcomes and qualifications. Since
this
is of primary importance, many educational establishments are pressured to ensure their children obtain the greatest grades possible.
This
pressure often leads to a narrow vision in which educators are so engrossed with academic
results
that they sometimes lose sight of those that are demonstrating progress against those that are consistently receiving excellent
results
.
In contrast
, there are educators that prioritise development.
For example
, many
teachers
provide feedback - whether oral or written - in order to help pupils tackle their areas of growth. In doing so, they are aware of students' strengths and weaknesses. When learners make necessary adjustments and illustrate progress via their work, a few
teachers
celebrate
this
through education-specific reward schemes and verbal praise. Despite
this
, I would argue that the majority of educators are overwhelmed by demands (often by their line managers) to achieve the best
results
; in a handful of schools,
for example
,
teachers
' salaries are performance-based and they only progress upon receiving outstanding
results
.
Therefore
, it is difficult to draw binaries and argue that it is either one or the other;
nevertheless
, I would argue that, while a handful of
teachers
are concerned with gradual improvements over time, as a matter of urgency and priority, most are primarily focused on pupils achieving academic success via
results
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender parity
  • Inclusive workforce
  • Corporate governance
  • Glass ceiling
  • Equal opportunity
  • Progressive policies
  • Workforce diversity
  • Merit-based promotion
  • Affirmative action
  • Empowerment
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