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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is job satisfaction for all workers?

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It is true that
job
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 satisfaction plays an important role in the
wellbeing
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well-being
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 of individuals because most
of
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apply
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people
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the people
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 spend
their
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 majority of
time
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their time
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 on their
career
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careers
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. While whether a person
satisfied
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 with his or her
job
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 can be influenced by a variety of reasons, it is really not realistic for employees to expect a totally perfect
job
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. There are various
of
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factors
can
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that can
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 pose an impact on
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the feelings
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 of
worker
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workers
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 including but not
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 to salary, sense of achievement, and the atmosphere of
workplace
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the workplace
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. For many
people
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, the level of salary
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 a direct link with their
job
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 satisfaction due to the fact that they need to rise
family
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their family
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 and live comfortably with their income.
Beside
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 salary, how much sense of
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achievement
acheivement
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achievement
 can be obtained
also
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 influent the motivation of
staffs
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.
Moreover
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,
increasing
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people
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number of people
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 pay closer attention
on
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to
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 the work environment, including the culture of their company and
the
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their
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 relationship with their colleagues.
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,
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the employee
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employee
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employees
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 may feel upset or frustrated when they have a
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 relationship with
his
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apply
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or
her
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their
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 superior.
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, it is not realistic to expect
fully
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a fully
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 satisfied
job
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 for most
of
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apply
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the
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workers in terms of
factors
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the factors
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 mentioned above, which usually difficult to be
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controlled
controled
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control
. Every
people
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 need to face the
competitions
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competition
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 from colleagues and other
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competitors
competitiors
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competitors
of
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in
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 the industry, which means
worker
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a worker
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 can not always be paid as they expected because
the
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employer will compare them with others. At the same time, it is difficult to be in an ideal work atmosphere because
people
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 may work with various colleagues, and some of them may be with bad tempers or strange characteristics. In conclusion, many factors can have an effect on
the
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job
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 satisfaction and it would be unrealistic to expect a
job
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 fully meet our
expectation
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expectations
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.
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