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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute jobs satisfaction ? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers ?

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Todays
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Today
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 most
people
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time
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at
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it
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works
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work
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. So,
job
satisfaction
 is vital to be happy and
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fulfilment
. In
this
 essay, I try to mention some main factors of
job
satisfaction
 and express why I think trying to
work
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our
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 pleasant situation can be realistic. The
first
 factor I should mention is that a high wage can have the inevitable effect on
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the employee
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employee
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employees
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 to be fine,
that
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 means salary is the more important reason to
work
 for everyone, so being well-paid is mentioned by most
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the
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people
.
Secondly
, it is noticeable that
job
 position has
main
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 role to be satisfied. To be
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precise
percise
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precise
, the
level
 and subject of
job
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the job
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 must be suitable for someone who hire to conduct that, it must have the same
level
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 capacity, experience and ability
of
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 workers.
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 more thing to have
the
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job
satisfaction
 is
friendly
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a friendly
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atmosphere
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atmosphere
 in
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work
 place. It can help
people
 to have
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enough
peac
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peace
, so they are focused to continue. It is obvious,
stressed
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the stressed
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 employee can not do their best.
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, I had to leave my
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previous
periviuos
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previous
work
 office because it had
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stressful
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stressful
 conditions.
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although
althuogh
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, I had
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 salary there,
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 I
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could
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could
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.
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the expectation
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expectation
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expectations
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 to
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be satisfied
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 for all workers can be hard to access, I think it is not a fiction situation. Nowadays importance of human
resource
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resources
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 is approved in all companies, and a lot of ways and
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methods
 are recognized to hire and maintain
the
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employees, so I believe that making
people
 satisfied can be easy just if employers try to use those ways.
On the other hand
, there are
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various
vrious
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various
 levels of
job
satisfaction
, so even if accessing to
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high
haigh
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high
level
 can not be realistic, striving to have the lower levels can be
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.
For instance
, paying
high
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a high
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 salary can be really hard for all workers, but creating some inventive ways to have
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 energetic and
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peaceful
peacfull
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peaceful
 place is possible. To sum up, because of the important role of
job
satisfaction
 in all
peoples
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people's
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 life, by mentioning the main factors like paying good
salaris
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salaries
, considering suitable
job
position
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positions
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 for each one, and having
positive
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a positive
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workplace
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work place
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workplace
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,
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job
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jobe
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job
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satisfaction
 cab be reachable.
Although
obtaning
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obtaining
 a high
level
 of
fullfillment
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fulfilment
 is really hard but by being creative and systematic it can happen.
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