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The below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.

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The pie charts illustrate the average percentage of
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food
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budget
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 which was spent on
restaurant
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meals
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 and home cooking, and the line graph indicates the number of
meals
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 which were served in two different places over a period of 30 years. Overall, during the time given, home cooking became far more papular among families.
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, while the demand for both fast
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meals
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 and sitdown
restaurant
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meals
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 rose during the time in question, the demand for fast
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meals
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finally
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 exceeded that
of
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 sitdown
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restaurant
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restaurants
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. According to the pie charts, from just 10% in 1970, the
budget
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 for
restaurant
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meals
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 saw a significant increase to half of the total
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 in 2000 (50%). In stark contrast, the
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 for home cooking experienced a decrease
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 40% , from 90% in 1970 to 50% in 2000. Turning to the line graph, while in 1970, the figure for both fast
food
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meals
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 and
restaurant
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meals
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 was at 20
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 per year, in 1980, the number of
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 in
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restaurant
restauarant
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restaurants
 was approximately 5
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 more than that of fast
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 ( somewhere in the vicinity of 40
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).
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, during the following two decades, the number of fast
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meals
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 overtook that of
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restaurant
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 and reach a peak of around 90
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 in 2000.
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