Some employers offer their employees subsidized membership of gym and other sport clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so. Consider the arguments from both aspects of this possible debate and reach a conclusion.

The two pie charts draw the conclusion from a survey of
boys
' and
girls
' cultural and leisure
activities
. Overall,
boys
preferred sports
such
as Basketball, Soccer and Skateboarding as well as video games, while most
girls
loved dancing and reading. It is
also
evident that both genders enjoyed listening to music. Looking at the details in the
first
pie chart, computer games account for over a
third
of total
activities
, being the most favoured among
boys
. Basketball and Soccer are ranked
second
and
third
with 26% and 17% respectively. For
boys
, reading was the least favoured activity among the others that made up only 2% of the chart.
However
, for
girls
, reading was ten times the figure of
boys
, ranking
second
after dancing which was nearly a quarter of the whole
activities
. Female children
also
participated in netball and video games at a rate of about 15% each. Unlike
boys
, Gymnastics was one of the free-time
activities
for
girls
, with 11%.
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