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Some employers offer their employees subsidized membership of gym and other sport clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so. Consider the arguments from both aspects of this possible debate and reach a conclusion.

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The two pie charts draw the conclusion from a survey of
boys
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' and
girls
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' cultural and leisure
activities
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. Overall,
boys
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 preferred sports
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 as Basketball, Soccer and Skateboarding as well as video games, while most
girls
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 loved dancing and reading. It is
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 evident that both genders enjoyed listening to music. Looking at the details in the
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 pie chart, computer games account for over a
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 of total
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, being the most favoured among
boys
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. Basketball and Soccer are ranked
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 and
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 with 26% and 17% respectively. For
boys
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, reading was the least favoured activity among the others that made up only 2% of the chart.
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, for
girls
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, reading was ten times the figure of
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, ranking
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 after dancing which was nearly a quarter of the whole
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. Female children
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 participated in netball and video games at a rate of about 15% each. Unlike
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, Gymnastics was one of the free-time
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 for
girls
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, with 11%.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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