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In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this changed occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

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In modern times due to age gaps children are spending less
time
 with their families. Earlier children used to sit with their
parents
 and used to spend
time
go
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 out with them because there was not
a
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develop
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 technologies they have now. Today's generation is fond of sitting on social media,
interaction
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 with strangers making new friends and hanging out with their friends.
This
 change has
been
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occurred because of phones. They give most of their
time
to
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with
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 their friends rather
sitting
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than sitting
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 with their families and
talk
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talking
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 about their day ask about them ask what did do
whole
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 day. Some
of
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children
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the children
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 go out for playing games and go for hanging out does outing
everyday
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. I do not think
parents
 should force their
child
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children
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 to be at home most of the
time
. It will be very difficult for them to change their schedule because they are already used
with
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 their regular schedule which will be very difficult for them to switch everything.
This
 has happened because of less communication between their
parents
. They should be more interactive towards their
parents
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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